A speech by the Environment Minister, Caroline Spelman, highlights the linguistic challenges faced by politicians in government and opposition.
Her speech at the Guildhall yesterday was an insight into her department’s contribution to the Rio +20 climate conference in a few months time.
Her speech featured many of the standard rhetorical flourishes we take for granted from a well-written political speech.
We heard a good contrast:
We have the evidence.
What we need is action.
And we heard a solid not this but that:
Not just exhortations and aspirations.
It has to be a workshop, not a talking shop.
All good stuff in a speech of this type. But it was the words in her speech that caught our attention.
The first indicator was the sentence length. The speech featured many lengthy sentences with an average sentence length of some 15 words or so. That’s above average for many speeches and certainly above average for a modern political speech.
Her choice of words suggested a broad continuity of policy between this Coalition government and the previous Labour government. Her words could have come from any speech written for David Miliband or other Environment Ministers before 2010. Did the Coalition bring in their own speechwriters? Perhaps not.
There was more than a sense of this with the opening lines of the speech:
In four months’ time, the world will meet to plot the path to sustainable development and green economic growth at Rio +20.
With this dramatic opening, the stakes are clearly high.
Her speech then followed with a string of new-age, new-economy jargon including:
But it wasn’t just the words in her speech that jarred. We also heard some choice phrases. For example:
Let me be absolutely clear that SDGs cannot and should not attract attention away from achieving the Millennium Development Goals by 2015 – the UK is firmly committed to achieving this.
Clear? Thought not. There was an activity statement that might be taken for a metaphor:
Governments can and must provide the framework for green growth.
And there was committee-speak of the worst order:
And I genuinely believe this Government is leading the way with that agenda.
I want to hear you making the case for green growth–to embed sustainable development in the economy of tomorrow.
I want you to help us push the envelope on natural capital and green accounting.
Yes you read it correctly the first time. The Minister wants her audience to…push the envelope. Good grief.
Her conclusion exhorted her audience on to greater things:
These are ambitions that will see us agree achievable and practical outcomes.
Generating the political will and a proper understanding of what we need to do.
An understanding that inspires real change in the world through sustainable development and green economic growth.
Representing the fusion of economic and environment recovery. And above all demonstrate to the world that this country is an environmental leader pursuing goals that balance environmental responsibility and economic security for today and for tomorrow.
Was this final section of her speech an appeal to her audience? If so, there was too much jargon and too much United Nations speak.
This wasn’t the language of the people. An electorate is just not going to get excited with this guff.
So with all this mediocrity, what was our favourite section in the speech? It has to be:
We’re establishing a Committee that reports to the Chancellor on the state of natural capital in England.
Superb, we will all sleep the better for knowing that. As GK Chesterton once noted:
I’ve searched all the parks in all the cities and found no statues of committees.
Thank you Minister, can we suggest that you overhaul your speech writing team.
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